Lusam

Needs work, but has potential

Narration is perfect, demonstrating a commitment to excellence. Storytelling is imaginative and vivid, but some plot holes exist. Writing quality is weak. I did read books 3-4 after listening to this 2-volume audiobook, because the books are free with kindle unlimited. There are expected to be six books in the series.

Told in 3rd person through various viewpoints. Set in a fictional world of kings, castles, mages, dragons, and gods engaged in sibling rivalry. Main characters include a 15-year-old homeless boy, a street girl, a warrior paladin, an evil warlord emperor, etc. The main characters form a fellowship, central to the series.

The hero Lusam develops his powers too fast, too easily. Find an ancient book. Absorb its magical gifts. Lather, rinse, repeat. The romance occurs too easily. The kissing and blushing (and implied sex) gets old. As for the marriage proposal, I was almost shocked at the author’s bad timing, given the circumstances.

On the upside, the warrior paladin (Renn) is totally credible.

The story is engrossing at times. However, the writing quality is just mediocre. A bit too much exposition. Misplaced commas and anachronistic language. Renn seems to only know one way to address people: “old friend” crops up several times in short conversations.

The author repeatedly has the comrades roaring with laughter at things that are barely worth a smirk. Laughing until they cry. Nothing wrong with a simple smile. A smirk. A chuckle. Whatever.

Lusam strangely laughs at painful or discomforting accidents, like getting dunked, or getting dragged through the mud by a galloping horse. Saying that characters laugh does not comedy make.

But the big problem is the Empire’s goal, to open a rift to the Netherworld. Are all these mages suicidal idiots?

9 of 9 people found this review helpful

No depth

What could have made this a 4 or 5-star listening experience for you?

better narrator, more depth, etc.

Has Lusam turned you off from other books in this genre?

No, but I will not be continuing with this series

Would you listen to another book narrated by Alex Wyndham?

If it was a very well written book I could handle listening to Alex, but there are so many out there that are better

What character would you cut from Lusam?

none

Any additional comments?

This is an ok book if you just want a story that you can get to the end of. There is no depth to the story and very little character building in my opinion.

5 of 5 people found this review helpful

Sadly this is a pretty mediocre book...

What would have made Lusam better?

Much less exposition, greater character depth, less predictable story arcs. Having the main character simply handed all of his powers was also an incredibly trite and frankly silly plot device that really stretched credulity. As others have noted, this is not two books - it's two sections of a book - which I find to be very dishonest advertising. I also found use of words like "force field" to be very off putting, those are not things a medieval culture has ANY conception of, and it could have been handled more creatively and originally in the world. Honestly the whole book suffers from a lack of creativity, polish, and general effort. It isn't awful... it's just very not great. The main villain is also very unbelievable, which is something I always hate.

Has Lusam turned you off from other books in this genre?

Nope.

Which scene was your favorite?

The "surgery" was fairly interesting.

What reaction did this book spark in you? Anger, sadness, disappointment?

Mild disappointment?

Any additional comments?

The narrator did a good job - each character has a distinct voice, and the emotions of the characters come across. If you are VERY forgiving about cliches and inconsistencies, it's not a terrible book - I've certainly read worse, but I won't be picking up any sequels.

25 of 29 people found this review helpful

Strong Narrator, Weak Novel

Flat characters, dubious interactions between them, unbelievable magic systems that the main character cheats to obtain anyways, and irresponsible and inconsistent writing.

On the positive, the narrator was enjoyable, and it gave me the idea that if this writer can succeed, then why not me? I'll be writing my own book series as well!

16 of 19 people found this review helpful

Warning is in order

This book is simple. The language and style are about a 4th grade level, as is the plot. I don't think i have rolled my eyes as many times in the last year as i did in the course of this book. The plot twists and progression are astonishingly unbelievable. Direct intervention by gods, more than once, are the kind of plot device used regularly. The author takes an omnipotent view and jumps in and out of every character with abandon, leaving nothing for the reader to ponder except why the author would take such liberties.

7 of 8 people found this review helpful

Overly cliche

Good narration, but very childish, simple and cliche writing, maybe that's the target audience and not me.

2 of 2 people found this review helpful

Thank God it was 2 books!

So I made this purchase knowing it was 2 books, and thank the good lord it came as 2 because I wouldn't have continued on to book 2 with just book 1 to go off of. This is the worst kind of Power comes easy story. Everything about this book (And even the series) comes easy to our main character. Who is a well developed, good kid whom you want to root for the entire series (Although that may be more towards how Cadman gets you to hate the villains, but it's still something), but he struggles with nothing. He's born a powerful mage. He met his soul mate in the form of the first person he talks to in years on the streets. He gets a dream job for a street kid that gives him shelter and food for both him and the girl. At the job, he just happens to find a magical book that grants him even more power just by reading it. The girl just happens to be the best knife thrower in the world. He gets a guardian protector that turns into more of a best friend/father figure. He meets a goddess, that next to nobody has ever seen, but that he sees often and saves his life a few time.

Then, once you get passed all this, you have to deal with the journey. In most stories, you deal with the intro, the Training, the journey, the love and the conflict. However, the Intro is very quick, the training and love are instantaneous, and the conflict is barely mention able. So all we are left with is the Journey. They are always moving from one situation to another. Always something to do but we have to share the entire trip because there is nothing else to discuss as everything else is set. It just becomes very frustrating and dull to listen too.

I be honest, I actually compared this to the "Mageborn"series by Michael G. Manning in the way that I grew bored with everything and eventually disliked the series by the end while not really being able to tell you why I disliked the series. Lusam actually does have everything. I just wish there was some true dialogue and a true battle that the MC's could loose. You never truly get that sense that they're in. They're either running too far a head, or he's just too powerful for them to be at risk.

Also, Wyndham really isn't that great. He isn't bad, just not great.

2 of 2 people found this review helpful

Love it.

I really enjoyed listening these books. I can't wait until books three and four are available on audible as well.

14 of 18 people found this review helpful

Great Story

I like the story line and character build in this story. Narration is also good. I would recommend this to others. Looking forward to book 3.

12 of 16 people found this review helpful

Amusing, but not the best written book.

There are quite a few things in the story that just don't make any sense. I don't want to give away any spoilers so I won't list them. The dialogue, and narrative, seem a bit amateurish. I would not recommend purchasing this audiobook, unless you get it on sale like I did. I'm kind of regretting my decision to purchase the next couple of books before listening to the first one.

1 of 1 people found this review helpful